Comments on: First sentences http://toothsoup.com/blog/2010/03/18/first-sentences/ white and creamy commentary from the stovetop of the internet Sun, 13 May 2012 23:59:06 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=3.3.2 By: Jon’s blog » Blog Archive » Lines http://toothsoup.com/blog/2010/03/18/first-sentences/comment-page-1/#comment-5584 Jon’s blog » Blog Archive » Lines Mon, 10 May 2010 20:36:53 +0000 http://toothsoup.com/blog/?p=1549#comment-5584 [...] I’m just going to post a short one today. The following exercise I picked up from Phill over at Tooth Soup. Phill I assume got it from Mehujael, who got it from Irad, who got it from Enoch. The idea is to [...] [...] I’m just going to post a short one today. The following exercise I picked up from Phill over at Tooth Soup. Phill I assume got it from Mehujael, who got it from Irad, who got it from Enoch. The idea is to [...]

]]> By: Cian http://toothsoup.com/blog/2010/03/18/first-sentences/comment-page-1/#comment-5495 Cian Fri, 19 Mar 2010 17:00:16 +0000 http://toothsoup.com/blog/?p=1549#comment-5495 Although thinking about it, if it was a moonless night, how can there be shadows? Although thinking about it, if it was a moonless night, how can there be shadows?

]]> By: Cian http://toothsoup.com/blog/2010/03/18/first-sentences/comment-page-1/#comment-5494 Cian Fri, 19 Mar 2010 16:59:26 +0000 http://toothsoup.com/blog/?p=1549#comment-5494 Meh, any first sentence with my name in it works for me. :D Meh, any first sentence with my name in it works for me. :D

]]> By: phill http://toothsoup.com/blog/2010/03/18/first-sentences/comment-page-1/#comment-5492 phill Fri, 19 Mar 2010 05:38:51 +0000 http://toothsoup.com/blog/?p=1549#comment-5492 @Mark: I loved your 1., partly because it's intriguing and partly because I have an obsession with shopping centres within stories. I forgot to include my favourites, but I think possibly the best first sentence I have ever read was from Alison Sebold's 'Almost Moon': 'When all is said and done, killing my mother came easily.' @AR: Yours definitely have more of an intriguing quality about them, if only because with their futuristic bent we want to know how these things are possible! I agree that first paragraphs are usually a better indication of quality than first sentences; then again I've been known to read half a book in the hope of being hooked. @Elena: Ooh, nice tip! I'll definitely give it a try in the future. @Mark: I loved your 1., partly because it’s intriguing and partly because I have an obsession with shopping centres within stories. I forgot to include my favourites, but I think possibly the best first sentence I have ever read was from Alison Sebold’s ‘Almost Moon’: ‘When all is said and done, killing my mother came easily.’

@AR: Yours definitely have more of an intriguing quality about them, if only because with their futuristic bent we want to know how these things are possible! I agree that first paragraphs are usually a better indication of quality than first sentences; then again I’ve been known to read half a book in the hope of being hooked.

@Elena: Ooh, nice tip! I’ll definitely give it a try in the future.

]]> By: Elena http://toothsoup.com/blog/2010/03/18/first-sentences/comment-page-1/#comment-5491 Elena Thu, 18 Mar 2010 22:39:39 +0000 http://toothsoup.com/blog/?p=1549#comment-5491 Good stuff! I'm so not game to do this with my own firsts. I like number 5 though ;) One trick I learned in a creative writing subject was to take the paper and fold it down to cover maybe the first third of your first page to find your 'real' first sentence. I tried it and it works! Sometimes. Because we put so much thought into that first and other opening sentences that we don't realise how much unnecessary words are in there. I dunno, try it and tell me what you think Good stuff! I’m so not game to do this with my own firsts. I like number 5 though ;) One trick I learned in a creative writing subject was to take the paper and fold it down to cover maybe the first third of your first page to find your ‘real’ first sentence. I tried it and it works! Sometimes. Because we put so much thought into that first and other opening sentences that we don’t realise how much unnecessary words are in there. I dunno, try it and tell me what you think

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